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Aziza
Posts: 81
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Race: Wick
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Wed Apr 24, 2019 1:46 pm


Character Name: Aziza
Aptitude Skills Used: Social
Focus Skills Used:
Income Tier: Poor

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Social (Poor to Average):


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Lars
Posts: 447
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Topics: 44
Race: Passive
: nil igitur mors est ad nos
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Mon May 13, 2019 11:11 pm


Character Name: Lars Savatier
Aptitude Skills Used: Mental, Social
Focus Skills Used: Laundering and whatnot
Income Tier: Servitude

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Social (Average to Good):
1. I'll Cry If I Want To
2. Sexual Healing
3. Where There Is No Echo
4. A Favor Owed
5. Contraband
6. I Think We're Alone Now

Mental (Good to Expert):
1. The Bridge To Nowhere (S)
2. If The Clouds Run Out Of Rain (S)
3. Sexual Healing
4. Where There Is No Echo
5. Accidents In The Banquet Hall
6. Hidden Breath Beneath The Floor

I don't think I reused any threads for the same aptitude skill? but let me know if I need to switch things!

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Tom Cooke
Posts: 1485
Joined: Fri Dec 21, 2018 3:15 pm
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Race: Raen
Location: Vienda
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Sun Jun 02, 2019 11:21 pm


Character Name: Tom Cooke
Aptitude Skills Used: Social
Focus Skills Used: Professional (Political Figure)
Income Tier: Wealthy

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Aptitude: Social – Good to Excellent:
  1. Some Kind of Nightmare
  2. Keep the Streets Empty for Me
  3. Glukupikron
  4. [M] I Don't Feel Like Dancing
  5. Whiskey, You're the Devil
  6. [Main Chapter] Kingsmeet

Justification: in the first three, he's using a mix of slang and Tek; in the latter three, he's chosen to adopt upper class speech/mannerisms (sometimes faultily). They're mostly not chronological. Primarily, these are threads which show that he's becoming capable of adapting his behavior and his performance of social class to his circumstances and company.

Focus: Professional (Political Figure) – Beginner (New Skill):
  1. All I Know Is— (S)
  2. Whiskey, You're the Devil
  3. [Main Chapter] Kingsmeet

Fake it 'til you make it get real good at fakin' it. Or somethin' like that, hey?

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Ava Weaver
Posts: 303
Joined: Fri Jun 07, 2019 11:17 am
Topics: 11
Race: Human
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Sat Aug 03, 2019 4:50 pm


Character Name: Ava Weaver
Aptitude Skills Used: Social
Focus Skills Used: Healer, Business Owner
Income Tier: Poor

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Social (Excellent to Master):
1. Souls and Silk
2. Misdirected
3. Smooth as Silk
4. Awkward Family Reunion
5. No Surrender
6. Woven Vexations (Dead)

Justification: In all these threads, Ava practices important social skills - whether convincing Diana Vauquelin to buy fabric in Souls and Silk, defusing a tense encounter with a galdor in Woven Vexations or trying to talk Caina down from killing Tom and blackening her name to the resistance in Awkward Family Reunion. She demonstrates (and refines) her ability to smooth over tense and uncomfortable situations throughout them all.


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Tom Cooke
Posts: 1485
Joined: Fri Dec 21, 2018 3:15 pm
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Race: Raen
Location: Vienda
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Mon Aug 19, 2019 9:41 pm


Character Name: Tom Cooke
Aptitude Skills Used: Mental
Focus Skills Used: Criminal (Professional), Mimic (Professional), Scrapping (Combat)
Income Tier: Wealthy

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Aptitude Skill - Mental (Excellent to Master)
  1. This Beautiful Complexity (Dead)
  2. Offerings to the Dead
  3. No Surrender
  4. All I Know Is (S)
  5. The Tools We Have
  6. My Least Favorite Life
At its heart, Tom's character is about thinking -- thinking deeply, thinking a lot, thinking creatively. He doesn't always make the best choices, but he's working overtime mentally to deal with the things that (un)life is throwing at him, and he's developing in a lot of different directions. He's also shown himself capable of holding onto his mind (& holding onto his body with his mind) in very metaphysically dangerous, overwhelming situations. He needs every bit of mental resourcefulness he can get, because it's all he's got.

Focus Skill - Professional: Criminal (Proficient to Expert)
  1. [Memory] Hands Grasping Tight
  2. [Memory] Never to Let Go
  3. [Memory] One of the Few Good Memories
  4. [Memory] If I Should Call You Home
  5. [Memory] Homo Homini Lupus Est (Dead)
  6. [Memory] The Roots
  7. Keep the Streets Empty for Me
  8. The Tools We Have
All of these are threads where Tom exhibits criminal skills or knowledge -- whether it's a memory thread and he's on the job, or he's using contacts/resources from his criminal past, or he's using his criminal experience to navigate a situation in the present day that's not entirely on the up and up.

Focus Skill - Professional: Mimic (New Beginner Skill)
  1. [Main Chapter] Kingsmeet
  2. No Surrender
  3. My Least Favorite Life

Focus Skill - Combat: Scrapping (New Beginner Skill)
  1. [Memory] Hands Grasping Tight
  2. [Memory] Never to Let Go
  3. [Memory] There Might Come a Day (Dead)
In life, he fought a lot, and he fought any way he could, with his fists or with a knife; he was no martial artist, but he learned how to gain an advantage. He was no stranger to hair-grabbing or a knee to the groin. Tom still knows how to throw a punch, theoretically, but hopefully that poor Physical Aptitude speaks for itself. Still, if he gets into a fight with an elderly librarian...

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Sarinah Lissden
Posts: 139
Joined: Thu Mar 29, 2018 3:42 am
Topics: 19
Race: Wick
Location: Old Rose Harbor
: Passively invested
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Mon Sep 09, 2019 7:38 am

Level Up - Sarinah!

Character Name: Sarinah Lissden
Aptitude Skills Used: Physical
Focus Skills Used: Dancer, Actor, Discipline
Income Tier: Poor

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Aptitude Skill - Physical (Good to Excellent)

- [M] Ready Or Not!
- Familiar Stranger [Sarinah]
- Never A Tumble
- A Mornings Trist [Tristaan]
- It Ent Home
- With or Without You

Focus Skill - Dancer (Proficient to Expert)

- Familiar Stranger [Sarinah]
- Never A Tumble
- It Ent Home
- [Closed] Jus' a Prelude
- How Old Exactly?
- Taken

Focus Skill - Discipline (Beginner to Proficient)

- [Open] Ye Can't Keep Me Down
- [M] Ready Or Not!
- Familiar Stranger [Sarinah]
- The Queens Play
- Never A Tumble
- A Mornings Trist [Tristaan]

New Focus Skill - Combat (Hand to Hand) (Beginner)

- Never A Tumble
- A Mornings Trist [Tristaan]
- With or Without You


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Niccolette Ibutatu
Posts: 552
Joined: Thu Jul 11, 2019 11:41 pm
Topics: 38
Race: Galdor
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Fri Sep 20, 2019 2:20 pm


Character Name: Niccolette Ibutatu
Aptitude Skills Used: Mental, Social
Focus Skills Used: Living Conversation, Duelist
Income Tier: Wealthy

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Mental (Excellent to Master):
1. Close to Your Chest
2. Unyielding (S)
3. Eye of the Storm
4. Never to Let Go
5. Bury Me Face Down
6. Where it Hurts

Justification: These threads involve a mix of mental skills, including a lot of magic, some implied studying and/or research (Close to Your Chest, Unyielding, Eye of the Storm, Never to Let Go, Where It Hurts), a fighting style that involves extensive analysis of one's opponents (Never to Let Go, Bury Me Face Down), and even some leadership (Eye of the Storm). Niccolette also displays an impressive ability to concentrate in various situations, including high-pressure ones (Eye of the Storm, Never to Let Go, Bury Me Face Down).

With the increase in mental skill, I'd also like to give Niccolette broken Gioran as a language.

Social (Average to Good):
1. Close to Your Chest
2. Unyielding (S)
3. Never to Let Go
4. Vengeance is a Cold Thing (S)
5. Bury Me Face Down
6. My Least Favorite Life

Justification: Niccolette's social skills are, perhaps, somewhat unorthodox. She certainly socializes a lot, whether making friends at Brunnhold (Close to Your Chest, Unyielding), and has the ability to get by, albeit with mixed success, in galdori high society (Bury Me Face Down, My Least Favorite Life). Her favorite social skill, of course, is intimidation, and she uses her field and her magic to considerable success in a variety of situations (Never to Let Go, Vengeance is a Cold Thing). Although not as subtle and nuanced in her social interactions as some, Niccolette manages to get by in Brunnhold, the Rose, on a pirate crew, and in high Viendan society, suggesting at least some social acuity.

Living Conversation (Intermediate to Advanced):
1. Close to Your Chest
2. Unyielding (S)
3. Eye of the Storm
4. Hands Grasping Tight
5. Never to Let Go
6. Vengeance is a Cold Thing (S)
7. The Dead Man's Wife
8. Bury Me Face Down
9. Where it Hurts
10. Wicked Game

Justification: Casting is central to Niccolette's identity; although she perhaps relies a bit heavily on conquest, she approaches magic seriously and cautiously (as an adult), and with reverence for the mona. Although demanding, she is also respectful, and a creative and often vicious castor. These threads take her from basic anesthesia spells (Close to Your Chest) and Brunnhold dueling (Unyielding) in 2707 all the way to a high-level duel against another intermediate castor (Bury Me Face Down) and bringing someone back from the brink of death to something resembling health in a single night (Wicked Game) in 2719. She uses a range of impressive spells, whether breaking legs (Hands Grasping Tight), numbing a tongue from a great distance (Eye of the Storm) or stopping a miscarriage (Wicked Game). She often does her best to push her limits, such as with advanced state manipulation spells, sometimes successfully (Hands Grasping Tight) and sometimes unsuccessfully (The Dead Man's Wife). Her backlash in 2015 (Hands Grasping Tight) shapes her as a castor, and teaches her to get what she wants using subtle spells as well as brute force (Never to Let Go, Vengeance is a Cold Thing, Bury Me Face Down). During the twelve years of casting covered by these threads, Niccolette casts a range of living spells, from healing (Vengeance is a Cold Thing, Wicked Game) to anesthesia (Close to Your Chest, Hands Grasping Tight, Bury Me Face Down) to adrenaline (Eye of the Storm, Vengeance is a Cold Thing) to control (Bury Me Face Down) to enhancement (Hands Grasping Tight) to nervous spells (Bury Me Face Down) to state manipulation spells (Hands Grasping Tight, The Dead Man's Wife) an impressive variety of spells that do physical damage (Unyielding, Eye of the Storm, Hands Grasping Tight, Never to Let Go, Bury Me Face Down, Where it Hurts). Overall, Niccolette has done a lot of magic!

Duelist (Beginner to Proficient):
1. Unyielding (S)
2. Eye of the Storm
3. Hands Grasping Tight
4. Never to Let Go
5. Bury Me Face Down
6. Where it Hurts

Justification: Some of these threads involve explicit duels following either Brunnhold Lawn rules (Unyielding) or traditional dueling (Bury Me Face Down), but they all involve casting against other active spellmakers, whether wick (Never to Let Go, Where it Hurts) or galdori (Eye of the Storm, Hands Grasping Tight). This skill is designed to capture that aspect of her combat proficiency - a sort of specialization in fighting other magic users.


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Fionn
Posts: 298
Joined: Wed Nov 28, 2018 11:17 am
Topics: 31
Race: Passive
Occupation: Misery
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Fri Oct 18, 2019 8:04 am


Character Name: Fionn
Aptitude Skills Used: Mental, Social
Focus Skills Used: Professional (Artist)
Income Tier: Servitude

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Professional - Artist (Beginner):
  • Home Again (Memory Solo)
  • Art for Art's Sake
  • Sculptures of the Moment

Mental (Good to Excellent):

Social (Excellent to Master:

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Drezda Ecks
Posts: 188
Joined: Sun Jul 15, 2018 12:10 pm
Topics: 21
Race: Galdor
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Fri Oct 18, 2019 8:27 am


Character Name: Drezda Ecks
Aptitude Skills Used: Physical, Social
Focus Skills Used: N/A
Income Tier: Wealthy

Advancement Request Thread List(s):

Physical (Poor to Average):
  • I, Spy (Dead)
  • A no good double black dog dare day (Memory)
  • [M] A Wrong Turn (Mature)
  • [M] Love's a Bitch (Mature)

Social (Excellent to Master):

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Aodh Elzo
Posts: 84
Joined: Thu Aug 08, 2019 12:56 pm
Topics: 14
Race: Wick
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Mon Oct 28, 2019 7:39 am


Character Name:Aodh Elzo
Aptitude Skills Used:
Focus Skills Used: Linguistics Tek
Income Tier:

Advancement Request Thread List:
Linguistics Tek: (Broken to Converastional)
The Thorn among the Roses
’For my next trick…



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